Recursive Process
Revision
My revision process, much like most things this semester, has changed a lot in terms of how I edit my papers. Before this semester, I did not exactly stress revision too much, I would read through my paper and fix some main ideas and spelling errors and then that would be it. This semester was different as I learned how to make my paper much better through the power of peer editing.
I feel as though my Showcase projects revisions were lacking in the way of being able to represent what I learned, so to look at this we will be looking at my Paper 2 about discourses. The first main revision I made was when I worked on really making sure my claims were visible in the paragraphs. My first paragraph lacked a real strong claim, the readers found themselves confused as to what exactly the papers main idea was. In the revision, I added a central idea and statement at the end of the introduction paragraph as well as within the beginning of all the other paragraphs in order to keep the structure of the paper clean. The claim I added was ” Though
I disagree with Gee, I do agree with Gee’s claim that “mushfake” techniques and meta-knowledge can help you gain more knowledge of a particular discourse”. This particular one was necessary because peer editors were confused on who I agreed with and who’s standpoints I stood by. As well, I completely revised the body paragraphs to include more ideas of mine than facts. The original paper seemed to be too factual and cookie cutter as it lacked my own ideas. In order to fix this, I went through the process of looking over everything which I had previously wrote and switched out facts from the papers with ideas which I had about the topic. This added the sense of uniqueness which a paper needs as well as added to the claim.
